TIMOTHY GIRAL
ENGLISH 101
Everyone
is searching for someone to love. People believe that there is someone out
there for everyone. Now, the thing about that is that there is over eight
billion people in this world. So, what happens if the person that is right for
you is all the way in Japan and you are here in New York? My answer to that one
is stop looking for the perfect match and try to find someone you can grow with
and build a type of relationship using “THE SCIENCE OF HAPPINES”. By applying
the science to a newly established relationship can multiply the positive outcomes
of the relationship and make both parties happier people. A couple can have a healthier relationship by avoiding fights. Also
growing as a couple and building an unconditional love from both sides of the
relationship.
is searching for someone to love. People believe that there is someone out
there for everyone. Now, the thing about that is that there is over eight
billion people in this world. So, what happens if the person that is right for
you is all the way in Japan and you are here in New York? My answer to that one
is stop looking for the perfect match and try to find someone you can grow with
and build a type of relationship using “THE SCIENCE OF HAPPINES”. By applying
the science to a newly established relationship can multiply the positive outcomes
of the relationship and make both parties happier people. A couple can have a healthier relationship by avoiding fights. Also
growing as a couple and building an unconditional love from both sides of the
relationship.
Being happy in life is every ones
goal. Achieving happiness on the other
hand takes a lot of work. To most people the idea of wanting to have a person To love them is an important aspect in life. In a relationship there would
definitely be problems if you aren’t happy. if you feel that you aren’t happy
there is many things that you can do to make it work. The science of happiness
consist of many things. Such as hot and cold states. If a person is upset In a
relationship is upset and starts an argument and it builds up to a big fight. They
must be careful with what they say because they are in a hot sate. Instead of
not arguing and then waiting till they cool off and have a normal conversation in
a cold state.” It sounds like a goof, but it gets at the fundamental difference
between how we behave in a “HOT STATE” (those of anxiety, courage, and fear)and
“COLD STATES”OF RATIONAL CALM”(STATED BY LOEWIENSTIEIN in a futile pursuit of
happiness.) Unless you have a healthy relationship you will not be able to be
happy. So, if you feel that your
relationship isn’t healthy you can cultivate it by using ,most of the approaches
given.
goal. Achieving happiness on the other
hand takes a lot of work. To most people the idea of wanting to have a person To love them is an important aspect in life. In a relationship there would
definitely be problems if you aren’t happy. if you feel that you aren’t happy
there is many things that you can do to make it work. The science of happiness
consist of many things. Such as hot and cold states. If a person is upset In a
relationship is upset and starts an argument and it builds up to a big fight. They
must be careful with what they say because they are in a hot sate. Instead of
not arguing and then waiting till they cool off and have a normal conversation in
a cold state.” It sounds like a goof, but it gets at the fundamental difference
between how we behave in a “HOT STATE” (those of anxiety, courage, and fear)and
“COLD STATES”OF RATIONAL CALM”(STATED BY LOEWIENSTIEIN in a futile pursuit of
happiness.) Unless you have a healthy relationship you will not be able to be
happy. So, if you feel that your
relationship isn’t healthy you can cultivate it by using ,most of the approaches
given.
Everyone has their flaws. its how
you cope with them and if you are willing to adapt to those flaws. Like in my
current relationship me and my partner have this type of relationship that we
think that each of our flaws are funny to one another. It can get on either one
of our nerves but we don’t let it affect us to the point where we aren’t happy
with each other. Now the problem that lies in my relationship is that we don’t agree
on certain things. Such as who is more mature, who is right, and who is wrong. Ever
since I began my journey with Dr. McCormick I have learned how to apply
everything I have learned in class to my relationship. In cultivating my
relationship I have found that some
times you must put aside your differences in the relationship. I see my relationship
as a story I will be able to tell one day in the future and I know that we are still
young. But we also are growing together as friends.” The mistaken notion that
finding love guarantees eternal bliss and leads partners to neglect the journey.”
(A statement in happiness in a relationship) . I strongly agree with that
statement because people just look for what is perfect for them and miss out on
the fun quality times in getting to know your partner. Gaining the ability to
give and receive unconditional love.
you cope with them and if you are willing to adapt to those flaws. Like in my
current relationship me and my partner have this type of relationship that we
think that each of our flaws are funny to one another. It can get on either one
of our nerves but we don’t let it affect us to the point where we aren’t happy
with each other. Now the problem that lies in my relationship is that we don’t agree
on certain things. Such as who is more mature, who is right, and who is wrong. Ever
since I began my journey with Dr. McCormick I have learned how to apply
everything I have learned in class to my relationship. In cultivating my
relationship I have found that some
times you must put aside your differences in the relationship. I see my relationship
as a story I will be able to tell one day in the future and I know that we are still
young. But we also are growing together as friends.” The mistaken notion that
finding love guarantees eternal bliss and leads partners to neglect the journey.”
(A statement in happiness in a relationship) . I strongly agree with that
statement because people just look for what is perfect for them and miss out on
the fun quality times in getting to know your partner. Gaining the ability to
give and receive unconditional love.
When somebody loves you for who you
are and nothing else that is called unconditional love. See this comes rarely almost
never honestly speaking. First a person must build up so much love for another
person and spend time with them. I feel if you get to the point of
unconditional love you have reached the point of your relationship that you can
be truly happy in the relationship aspect. Some people belive that it is a myth
.” when a man falls in love with a woman, he does so for certain conscious or
unconscious reasons.( stated in the unconditional love part of happiness in
relationships)” meaning you don’t know that you have that type of love you just
do. I feel that if you cultivate and use the method talked in this paper you
can achieve happiness in your relationship. You just have to work on it.
are and nothing else that is called unconditional love. See this comes rarely almost
never honestly speaking. First a person must build up so much love for another
person and spend time with them. I feel if you get to the point of
unconditional love you have reached the point of your relationship that you can
be truly happy in the relationship aspect. Some people belive that it is a myth
.” when a man falls in love with a woman, he does so for certain conscious or
unconscious reasons.( stated in the unconditional love part of happiness in
relationships)” meaning you don’t know that you have that type of love you just
do. I feel that if you cultivate and use the method talked in this paper you
can achieve happiness in your relationship. You just have to work on it.
By applying the science of happiness
to your relationship you can go far in that relationship. By using the
scientific method you can increase your happiness. Also by cultivating a
relationship can bring unconditional love.it
all takes time and effort. One must be patient and don’t expect it to happen so
soon. Remember rome wasent built in a day.
to your relationship you can go far in that relationship. By using the
scientific method you can increase your happiness. Also by cultivating a
relationship can bring unconditional love.it
all takes time and effort. One must be patient and don’t expect it to happen so
soon. Remember rome wasent built in a day.
Dear Timothy,
ReplyDeleteFirst let me start by saying that I think your ideas and concepts about love and relationships are good. I would have liked for you to define what "The Science of Happiness" is in the first paragraph. By defining the term readers will have a more clear understanding of what you've based your opinions on. Also, you need to work on the structure of your essay. There are alot of sentences that are hard to understand. Work on developing your sentences, I found alot of run on sentences when reading your essay.
Please be sure to work on your grammer,(spelling, run on sentences, punctuation, capatialization. etc. I've noticed alot of misspelled words and errors. I think you should also give a more accurate definition of what a cold state & hot state is. A reader should not have to assume the definition and that makes it easier for them to comprehend your points.
Your thesis should be stronger as well, I understood what you were trying to say but with a little more effort it will be great. Be careful when using the words "is" & "are". I found some errors were you used the words incorrectly. Also work on the proper use of past & present tense words. I found some errors where you used the past tense where a present tense should have been.
There is also no need to capitalize words and phrases in the middle of your essay. Be sure to always capitalize the first letter of a word when beginning a sentence. Overall I think your essay is on it's way to being great! With a little more time and effort you well on your way to having a great essay...and being a "Love Doctor"! :-)
Sincerly,
Jessica Bryant